I think of it not being as powerful when one says how your character is feeling. I find if I said something like "Enzo's eyes widen" and then add something help describe what he is doing, it would be much better. It's more interesting to see how the other people interpet the feelings they think you are expierencing.
The act of saying how you actually feel is find is related to saying what you are thinking. "Enzo looks at the man in front of him, thinking to himself he is a savage." The other man in real life wouldn't think I thought he was a savage unless my actions did something to say that, or I actually said he was a savage.
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